In this writing, we helped Oliver to work on one of our goals.
We wanted him to add more detail to make his story more interesting so we asked him some questions and used the answers to turn his simple sentences into complex sentences.
It sounds like Oliver and his Dad had a great time during the storm.
I like the way you have added more detail to your writing and turned your sentences into complex sentences. Well done, that is a tricky skill to learn.
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